How to write a persuasive letter

Kids have a new playground with grass instead of asphalt at a Rhode Island charter elementary school. For two years, a committee of students planned the playground.

Assigned to write a persuasive letter, fourth-grader Bernardo Garcia wrote to an executive at Lowe’s home improvement stores:

Can you donate some turf to our school which is the Learning Community Charter School? One reason why I think we need turf is that in a middle of a soccer game some boys get hurt and they have to go to the nurse who cares about us Nurse Liz. Nurse Liz can’t take this much chaos in her office. My second reason why I think we need turf is that we fall and get hurt cause our yard is made out of cement. If we had turf we can Dive for the Ball without getting hurt. My last reason why I think we need turf is that we can get scratches Big ones. If we had turf we would get no scratches.”

Lowe’s donated $110,000.

Students are now writing letters in hopes of getting a science fair.

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  1. “Nurse Liz can’t take this much chaos in her office.”

    Darn it, that’s cute.

    I bet it was that sentence that got them the money. 😀

  2. That was freaking awesome. If offered a choice, I think I’ll go to Lowes next. Good for them and good for the kids.

  3. Thanks for picking up on the story of our playground. We are committed to helping our students to develop their own opinions, agree and disagree with others, and use their voices to speak out. This example is getting a lot of attention, but we’re proud of the many ways our students share their ideas and stories.

    Images of the unique playground design (of course the students weighed in on that too!)
    are here.

    The Learning Community

  4. For a 4th grader, that wasn’t bad. Not bad at all.

    “Nurse Liz”? You can tell they care about kids at that school.